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I have quite a lot of projects going, but one more will not hurt LOL fortunately it is practically finished anyway.
This time, a story in Aoi Hikari style. If you know what it means. ;)
Story idea from this artist https://www.pixiv.net/member.php?id=2336314
Unlike most of my other stories it will actually end with death.
Ok, so this will be enuogh for today.
I will add more pictures when I will put text on them.
It seems to me she is already showing him something interesting. Haha! Looking forward to more of the story, Onix!
Can confirm, starting new and new stories without finishing any of the old ones is indeed my stile :-)
I'm totally looking forward to the story, but what is with all the spatial anomalies? On the second picture that small pool looks pretty close to the large one, but on the second from last the large one is nowhere to be seen, then it appears again on the last picture, but seems further away than it used to be. Also on the second from last picture the small pool is deep enough for kids to stand in it submerged if not fully then at least to their necks, and it's totally not some weird illusion due to water bending light because on the same picture the girl has her lower legs lowered vertically which is impossible with the setup from the last picture, which is why on that last picture her pose is different and she has her legs stretched out now.
You are so observant ;) LOL
But that was actually me screwing up the first picture and I expected that nobody will notice ;)
My other stories do not really have endings they can continue forever while this one will end. So when I mentioned your style it is similar to the the Rin and Len stories. >>32506
Haha yes but there will be something more ;)
It happens that adding text sometimes takes more time than making pictures :)
But here is the next part
the whole story has a bit over 50 pictures.
I wonder if you can guess where it is going :)
Nice pics, Onix. I can't believe they would be stupid enough to slip off the diving platform with no water in the pool, or would they?
You can be the reincarnation of Sherlock Holmes LOL
But you are only 80% right since as I mentioned It is in the story Aoi Hikari style.
If he slips off the diving board, I wonder what he can grab to save himself. Hmmmmmm?
Slip? Eh, that would be boring.
If it is indeed inspired by my Len and Rin stories, it would be more like "but if there's no water it only means that we die if we jump, not that we can't jump at all" "oh, you're right! let's go then!"
Though given the relationship so far I can also imagine one of the kids pushing the other off.
Yes, in fact that was my original idea when I started this story.
but that would be also a bit too plain if they just jump so I have something more interesting ;)
Cool, let's see it then :-)
Can't wait for more
you can have it a couple different ways. She dives in and breaks her neck. Or he tosses her from the diving board when she's falling she losses her bladder.
Ok I guess I will torture you a bit with waiting LOL
I already have full story but got tired uploading it. So I will finish it later.
Also this way there will be less spoilers ;)
Damn you tease :-)
So this is all story.
Kinda the first time when I managed to complete something. :)
But maybe I will add some epilogue later so it may be not the end after all.
Since I will later upload it to pixiv please tell me if you see some errors in the text.
Or if you think some text can be changed/added to be more interesting.
What for the text, on the first pic there's a space before the dot which shouldn't be there, also should be "Can't wait" and "They've just finished". Second picture "I've never seen". Also throughout the text you don't have a dot in the end for most of the sentences, which doesn't seem to be intentional because for some you do.
Good stuff Onix (Even though I don't usually care for this kind of thing).>>32577
Should be "Damn" not "Dam".>>32567
They seem to be floating in the air?>>32590
God that's epic!
Thanks for the pics, Onix. If uploaded elsewhere, the title should be "A Very Strange Story" rather than "Sotry." The crash scene in 32590 looks pretty good. Nice renders!
Hehe silly but fun! I really enjoyed it :-D Your CG girls are just too cute! I want one :-P
It was pretty hard to make this story at least moderately sensible and not too boring LOL>>32599
Since this is quite strongly related to your work, I think you should give more extensive judgment if you would do something different ;)
I wonder how accurately I managed to replicate that mood while also trying to make it reasonable>>32608
I think when I will be uploading it somewhere else I will try to thing some other title.
Unfortunately, it is impossible to edit your own posts on gurochan so it is stuck with that mistake in the title even if I noticed it almost immediately.
that Crash picture was the hardest of all, you cannot imagine how long it took to cover everything with blood like that :)
Actually my intention was to make something very crazy so that people would read it with interest but in the end, they were left totally confused thinking what the hell happened ;)
depending on how you look at it this story can be either very silly or also very serious ;)
Give that girl a Darwin Award!
Haha this comment wins!
Hey, she didn't do it because she was stupid, she did it because it was fun :-)>>32618
Well, it's hard to judge how I would do that, because it's a different medium from what I do. In text I can just spell out the characters' thoughts and emotions, while pictures are more focused on visuals. One thing that comes to my mind is that when the girl said "just try it" (rip her piercing off) for a moment I thought she actually means it without sarcasm, like if he wants to see what happens he should just go and try it, and then he would actually rip it off and fall because he had to pull hard and she would laugh at his fall.
Another thought I had before you posted the ending was how it might go with one kid jumping first and not dying immediately, and the other asking how was it, and the jumped kid would say something along the lines of "the landing is somewhat rough, but the flight felt awesome, totally worth it", then the other jumps too and confirms it is indeed a very enjoyable experience, then as they look at each others eyes with happy smiles and expressions like "see, told you it would be fun" "yeah, it totally was", they contentedly bleed out.
But your ending is fine too.
One thing that comes to my mind is that when the girl said "just try it" (rip her piercing off) for a moment I thought she actually means it without sarcasm, like if he wants to see what happens he should just go and try it, and then he would actually rip it off and fall because he had to pull hard and she would laugh at his fall.
You made my very angry because I did not thought that myself LOL
but yeah that woud be a great idea and extremely relevant to the plot.
Not dying immediately at this situation is kinda impossible :)
but again that kind of ending is also good. maybe I will use those ideas for some other story >>32622
You now, that actually could be an idea for a new title. Maybe for entire new series with same characters :) because there are lots of stupid ways to die.
You should continue on with the story. A janitor finds her body
It is possible that I continue it after all adding some more funny scenes.
But not doing anything to move dead body, because scene will break apart.
> Not dying immediately at this situation is kinda impossible :)
Life pro tip: you don't have to land on your head. Wikipedia says "Overall, the height at which 50% of children die from a fall is between four and five storey heights above the ground".
> You now, that actually could be an idea for a new title. Maybe for entire new series with same characters :) because there are lots of stupid ways to die.
Why the same characters? It sounds like it should be a competition between various characters to get the award. Like they treat it like an actual award and each tries to come up with the most silly way to die.
Yes, meant that it is not possible to survive if falling on the head or on the belly.
if you hit hard concrete. it would be possible if she falls on the legs but it will be too hard to show the results in 3d LOL
It can also be different characters, but using same ones kinda makes an illusion that they are immortal even if those are unrelated stories like in your stories where they die over and over ;)
Another reason is that creating new characters for every story is a bit some of the extra work. So maybe I will limit differences to changing their hair. It may be the same boy and different girls as well. or twin girls since twins render like one character in terms of resources.
In the end, someone probably has to survive or else there is nobody to observe the death. ;)
In my opinion, it is also funnier if characters do not explicitly declare their desire to kill themselves, but find some other way to justify it.
By the way, some time ago when I was into roleplay, I met one girl who was into things like that where she was into killing herself various ways :)
Oh yes forgot to mention that maybe she was not stupid but this is a really stupid way to die and that is what makes it funny. ;)
I kinda want to have that kind of dual meaning like some prank where it is not entirely clear why it happened.
Very well then, curious to see what you'll come up with.
One way to solve the "my character is dead but I don't want to design a new one" problem is a world of clones.
Silly, suicidal clones.
Well, who would possibly clone suicidal kids to watch them snuff themselves?
(Suicidal as in "reckless and not caring about their own demise" - not necessarily the emo goth version, although that can be made fun, too )
> Well, who would possibly clone suicidal kids to watch them snuff themselves?
lol, who wouldn't :-)
Though I don't really like the clone idea, because carelessly dying doesn't sound as careless when there'll be more of you anyway.
Well, clones are unnecessary it is just lack of continuity like in most TV series.
You know in one episode character died or something else happened next episode it is fine and has no clue about anything that.https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/DeathIsCheap
But looks like it is not necessarily always going to end with immediate death.
Splyf's Trine and Christine are always alive again for the next story with no explanation so I don't see why your characters couldn't be the same :-)
Those ideas may be useful for torture festival thread more than here.
Cute girls! Looking forward to seeing more of the new story. Hmmm…I don't suppose any sea gull insertions would be fatal, at least not for the girls. Ha! Keep those excellent renders coming, Onix!
First there's the dare challenge… for example two contestants each insert a water hose into their butt/pussy and turn themselves into waterballoons. Whoever pulls out first loses…
the rules don't explicitely say if bursting counts as win or lose, but it might be messy ;)
variants possible with self impalement, cutting, strangling, …, …
very closely related the attempt to one-up each other on activities that get increasingly dangerous/deadly. Including self mutilation, cutting of limbs, etc… or inserting stuff leading to self impalement on thicker and thicker pins/nails/spears/poles/…
Or alway popular among kids, playing doctor: measure each others fever, probe orifices, conduct a cesarean, open heart surgery or the ever popular life dissection…
variants include playing "morgue" (coroner, pretend corpse) or "prison" (executioner / dead man/girl walking )
More "suicidal" is good old exploration/curiosity maybe over questions such as "if your head is cut off, you're instantly dead" "no! that's not true, heads stay conscious!" "I don't believe that"
"Ill prove it. I'm gonna cut my head of and then you ask me stuff, I blink once for yes and twice for no!"
Or also "its impossible to snap ones own neck" "no, it isn't!"…
Yet another popular thing is reenactment of magic shows. The getting sawn in half trick is always so fascinating. If one manages to do that to themselves: extra kudos.
"No, wait, I think you need to use a rope and squeeze your waist really really tight. then cut between the ropes, otherwise all your squishy things will come out!"
(might ease render effort ;) )
U could have 2 play hunter and deer, butcher and pig, … so many fun games that can go horribly wrong :)
Auro erotica would fit the bill, playing breath games for example
standing on a box with a rope around there necks and the box breaks just as they come
I like the idea of putting larger and larger objects in their pussy (and subsequently womb) until they're torn apart from inside. Maybe have a point where their womb is torn and the insertions are squishing their internal organs into pulp, but they still continue because they think they can get an even larger insertion, so why stop here. A fire extinguisher surely must be involved on the way.
Also the beheading idea reminds me of one of mine, where Len and Rin wonder what it feels like to be beheadead, so they behead Rin and Len looks into her eyes to see what she feels, and physically she feels immense pain that makes her only wish to die sooner so it would end, but the pain makes it feel like it lasts forever, but at the same time neither Len nor Rin herself regret anything, it doesn't even occur for them to regret it, they were curious what it would feel like and now they know, so their curiosity is properly satisfied, and there's nothing wrong with experiencing a pain so overwhelming it just makes you want to die as soon as possible, if that's what beheading ended up feeling like, then cool, now they know it.
As for girl twins, they might shove their heads into each other's wombs and suffocate. Maybe it's some sort of unbirth play, or maybe they just find it funny. Like they're casually 69ing and then one out of nowhere comes up with an idea to shove her head in her sister's womb. The other sister treats it maybe kinda like being tickled or maybe like some playful wrestling? Like she kinda minds it but not really, actually she finds it funny too, so ends up shoving her own head into her sister's womb too. Maybe there's some like not really serious fighting involved, where each sister tried to not let the other get into her womb, but not really, just having fun. So by the time the second gets inside the first one's womb the first one is already suffocated from all the fighting while inside her sister's womb. So then the second one goes "huh, you're already dead? oh well, all the fighting mane me kinda tired too" and relaxes, suffocating too.
A combination of the unbirth and beheading ideas is: one girl tries to get inside the other's womb, playing like she's her baby, but she can only get her head inside and laments about it, so the other girl decides to help and cuts her head off, this way if she's only a head, she's all inside like she wanted.
Another idea is the kids find something that is shaped like a dildo, but clearly not designed to go into one's pussy. Like a cylindrical grater. Before I used it in my Suspicious Silence story, I had an idea where Len and Rin see it like it a store and laugh about it like "lol that grater looks like a dildo" "haha it would tear my pussy to shreds" and proceed to actually trying it just for the laugh. But since I've already used the grater in the Suspicious Silence story, maybe you can come up with something else to the same effect. But I also wouldn't mind if you just use the grater.
A girl might impale herself on some pole, like maybe a sidewalk pole, but she isn't really trying to impale herself, but to see if she can perform a side split with that pole in her pussy, and in the end she can, although the pole ends up tearing her from inside and maybe exiting through her belly, maybe through her chest, missing the lungs and heart so she has time to admire her own gymnastic ability before she dies, maybe through her mouth, depending on how long it was to begin with. Anyway the girl is satisfied that she successfully performed a split and doesn't bother to acknowledge the fact she ended up impaling herself all the way through, like its totally irrelevant.
Oh, since we have two girls, it might start with one impaling herself just slightly on that pole to masturbate, then somehow the splits end up mentioned, and she just doesn't bother to get off the pole before giving a demonstration. The other girl can then help her sister by pushing her down on her shoulders.
Then instead of her dying it can end up with her just getting up (probably with the help of her sister) and they just go on their way, but the impaled girl has a gaping pussy and optionally a cervical prolapse, through which blood and pulped internal organs leak out, but they just go away not bothering to acknowledge that.
Love the way Black Raven thinks! Especially the execution or dissection games taken too far!
You have nice ideas, but this time I was thinking about how it is possible to die as not just get mutilated. (and also to do it in a somewhat questionable way without implicitly stating that it is going to end with death)
I may use execution game idea to do something very short.
but with the stories that end with death, you need to have a good plan on how it will all go ;)
One of the possible games is Guro version fo twister :)>>32760
You may see that idea with the grater in the slightly different form but I guess I better not spoil everything :)
Idea with the pole may be useful for gurovision thread as one of the performances
Hitchcock the birds attack the two girls
I started few more projects but they are way to big to show any results now
So I started one more short story based on the one Aoi Hikari writings ;)
I wonder if he already knows what it will be about ;)
I love to see how the "necklaces" works
Ha-ha, I think I have a pretty good idea :-)
I'm curious about the origins of what seems to be an already existing stain of blood on the carpet though.
hehe, it would be strange if you had no idea. LOL
As about carpet you made a good observation :) unlike other artists all details in my works have meaning ;) But it is not that straightforward and actually you will have to think yourself about it. ;) Although I would love to hear what came in your mind ;)
The overall purpose of all that is character development. She is now in her room unpacking a box.
Well, there doesn't seem to be any damage on the girl herself, thus so far I can only speculate that it might be from playing with her sibling or friend. Will the continuation reveal more about it, I wonder?
Hmm this new story puts me in mind of the "Fountains" story about the rock concert where everyone has to wear explosive collars! Let's see if that's where this is going… :-D
Yes, that's possible but also very straightforward.
But it also can be more "metaphysical" ;-)
Since it got some attention I will try to make an explanation later.
But you should not only focus on the bloodstain but on the whole room as well. ;)
Maybe it will make more sense later.>>33389
Probably I can move to another project because everyone knows the ending already LOL
But since I made more than half of the story I will finish it :)
Not all of us "newcomers"have seen your earlier stories, so I haven't a clue where the story is going. Please do finish it! Thanks!
I suppose that must be a continuity of my joke LOL
because the ending of the story is just as evident as the ending of Edward's stories that girl will be cooked eventually
I should post the next part today once I will add text to the pictures.
True but we want to see the circumstances! Who she wants to surprise and why! :-D
I will stop here today.
Not as much progress as usual (that's revenge for you Edward, for dragging your story so long. Now suffer while waiting until the next day LOL)
It will still continue for a little without guro content.
> You win if you cum before midnight
Shouldn't it be if he doesn't cum? Or if he makes her cum? Otherwise what's the challenge in it?
I really love the girls in your stories! My only tiny criticism is I found it a little hard to tell who was saying what in this panel. Maybe put their words in different colour text to help old folk like me out? :)
It is all right.
Even if it looks too easy, logically, if he has to cum to win, she will try to prevent it from happening somehow ;)
If what happens later will turn him off or he will run away he will fail and if he will like it, he will win and they can stay together ;)
Of course, if you were reading carefully you can notice a clue for the story ending. ;) >>33416
I think it was pretty obvious since bubbles are very close to the character who is saying them so I decided not to bother with arrows. The boy did not say anything besides "Wow! really?"
Maybe it was a bit confusing that I placed text into separate bubbles instead of one.
I suspect you got it all right after all, just started to doubt it ;)
Yes it was mostly that I doubted I was reading the flow of the conversation properly - it was the only panel where I had that issue 'though :-) I still love your girls! Can you "Weird Science" me one for my birthday? :-P
Hmmm. If it were me I'd be sucking those bandaids off with my mouth. Ha! Can't wait to see what happens next!
I also love how innocent and confused the boys are in these stories!
Today's part of the story ;)
When I started adding text it actually went a bit diffrent route than I planned initially and turned out quite a bit longer than I expected.>>33422
Actually that was totally unwanted feature at first because the first story actually felt as if that girl killed herself because she did not wanted to be with such a boy who does not show enuogh enthusiasm or takes any initiative ;)
So eventually she decided to give up and said "eh, screw it he is too boring I am leaving" LOL
And this is not what I wanted readers to think ;)
But there is just no way anyone can match this crazy girl anyway LOL
Maybe in some future story they will both die ;)
I had the same reaction as the boy to the second piercing ;-)
Curious to find out what she's hiding under the third bandaid!
I hope you will not be disappointed. She is very full of surprises ;)
It's almost impossible to guess what your crazy girls have planned - that's part of what makes them so much fun :-D
So that was the secret behind the last band-aid ;)
Poor boy may actually lose this game at this rate LOL
Nothing a sharp knife or scissors can't resolve. Haha! Great pics again, Onix. Love the needle through the bellybutton! Thanks for the update work.
Hehe, even then, who knows what other surprises await there. This girl seems to be very determined to make the boy fail while keeping him aroused to the max LOL
Also, unfortunately, there are no scissors in the bedroom but he will find some solution ;)
They will do nicely!
I love creative kids like these two :-)
Haha awesome! Kinda like this boy's cruel streak ;-)
Coitus Interuptis in extremus
Next step would be a razor blade piece hidden inside vagina?)